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[This time we open in the theater. Ranma and the others are all sitting around looking bored.
After a moment Nescaro’s voice is heard over the speakers]
Nescaro: Hello Kiddies. Are you all still there?
Ranma: Like we have a choice.
Nescaro: Quite. Well I’ve got your second fic for the day ready. It’s part two of Evening at Lita’s.
Makoto: Noooooo!
Nescaro: Yes quite. And if you thought the first one was bad….You ain’t seen nothing yet! [The fic starts after a moment]
Hi. It's me Vermilion.
Zoisite: Yeah we know.
Well, I hope that you enjoyed the first chapter of "Evening at Lita's".
Here now is chapter two. Enjoy it just as you did with chapter 1.
Makoto: Don’t worry about that.
Oh, yeah, you'll want to read the first chapter
Jinnai: If you want to get rid of your lunch.
before reading this. That way you'll get some idea of what has happened before.
Should I put the Sailor Moon disclaimers here? You know that
they don't belong to me.
Makoto: Thank god.
If you wish to mail me, my address will be at the end of this
chapter.
Now, without further adieu.....
Zoisite: I don’t know about the rest of you, but I wouldn’t mind some more adieu.
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Zosite: [singing] Oh starry night...
EVENING AT LITA'S
by Vermilion
Chapter 2: Moon Over Jupiter
Jinnai: Nice title. Now we know exactly what’s gonna happen.
Zoisite: Like we didn’t anyway
Lita put the disc in the stereo and closed the door.
"So," Mina asked, "what's the surprise?"
Ranma: That this fic is five chapters long.
Ukyo: You’d think he’d feel guilty after the first one.
"This," Lita answered. She then pushed the play button and closed
her eyes as she could feel the beat of the song ("Head Like a Hole" by
Nine Inch Nails)
Zoisite: More like hole in your head.
overtaking her. With the music in control, she proceeded to sway her hips while seductively pulling on the string n her school uniform.
Zoisite: Dumb question but why is she wearing her school uniform this late at night?
Ranma: You know the drill, smile and nod.
When the string was undone, Lita then slowly pulled each sleeve down to her wrists.
Ukyo: Which would have ripped the back open.
Ranma: You’re paying enough attention to notice that?
She then turned around, took her shirt off, and threw it toward the girls with Raye being the one to catch it.
Meanwhile, Serena and Mina were enjoying every minute of Lita's
surprise.
Zoisite: It’s not really much of a surprise is it?
Ukyo: Dumb question but if they’re all gay, why have they been chasing every man that gets within three feet of them?
Makoto: We’re not that bad….Well maybe.
When Lita took her shirt off, the two of them whistled
in admiration. Mina drew out bills from her purse causing
Lita to dance illicitly toward her.
Makoto: Oh for crying out loud….
Ukyo: I take back everything I said about Sweet Dreams being the dumbest fic ever written.
Lita saw the bills and held her hand out in a "We're number one" style.
Jinnai: Why?
Zoisite: Who cares?
"Wait," she said. She then stepped back, turned around
and pulled her skirt down to the music's beat.
Zoisite: Well that hit the ground almost as fast as my intrest level.
Makoto: Slow and painful Vermillion.
She then kicked the skirt backwards with it landing on Serena's lap. That was enough to get Serena's juices flowing.
Ukyo: Quick question…Why is it in every lemon story the women flow like rivers?
She could feel the juices wetting her panties and closed her legs. All she thought about now was
Ranma: Getting out of this fic.
Jinnai: Didn’t we do that one already?
Ranma: Running gag.
Lita and hearing the song chorus:
"Bow down before the one you serve,"
"You're going to get what you deserve."
Zoisite: If that’s true then the author of this one’s probably dead by now.
Jinnai: We can only hope.
(Note: That is the chorus
to "Head Like a Hole")
Jinnai: You just said that.
While all this was happening, Amy just sat back and watched.
Her earlier adventure with Lita left her tired. Still feeling weak
from it, Amy just smiled and enjoyed the show.
Ukyo: Yep, that ice cube definatly had LSD in it.
Zoisite: Let’s hope the bags hold out.
Lita bent down in order to let the girls get a good view of her
perfect ass through her thong. She stood up slowly while slowly
unstrapping her bra.
Zoisite: Get on with it will ya? We’d all like to get outta here!
When she turned around, she cupped her hands
over her breasts while her bra stuck out in one hand.
Jinnai: Huh?
She then danced toward Mina and bent down to allow Mina to get a peek at
Lita's rather large bosom.
"How about that cash," Lita asked seductively.
Jinnai: [Mina impersonation] How about putting your clothes back on first?
Mina wasted no time in stuffing her wad of bills in Lita's panties.
With that accomplished,
Ukyo: I’m a little confused here. What did that accomplsh?
Jinnai: Boring the audience.
Lita did a seductive walk toward Raye and Serena.
She held up her hand that contained her bra. She put her other hand
down allowing her breasts to viewed in all their glory.
Zoisite: [singing] Glory glory Halleluya!
Ranma: Nice pick up.
"Who wants it?"
All: We don’t!
she asked. Both girls shot up their hands. Lita
looked toward Serena and looked toward Raye. She noticed that
they were both very aroused judging by the wet spots on their jeans.
Ukyo: That’s only because they spilled their drinks at dinner.
Lita smiled inwardly knowing of this.
She then took her bra and put it on Raye's head. Raye grabbed
the bra and clutched it like a security blanket.
Zoisite: Then Snoopy came by and grabbed it in his mouth.
Ranma: That’s kinda far in left field isn’t it?
Ukyo: No more then the fic.
"It's yours," Lita said to Raye. She then noticed that Serena was
rather disappointed. She then walked over to her and helped her up.
"I have something much better for you,"
Zoisite: Hands up all who saw that coming. [everyone raises their hand]
she whispered in Serena's ear. She then grabbed her breasts and pushed them on the sides of Serena's face.
Ukyo: [impresonating Serena] Don’t do that! I just ate!
Makoto: [turning green again]
Lita then squeezed them making them press against
Serena's face even harder. This turned Serena on even more.
Lita turned around and was just about to peel her panties off
when the song suddenly stopped. She looked toward the radio and saw
that Serena was standing there having stopped the song.
All: [cheer]
"What are you doing," Lita asked.
Zoisite: Saving us all a lot of pain!
Serena said nothing. Instead, she got out her crystal locket and
held it up in the air. Within a few seconds, Serena was replaced
by the Moon Princess. The other girls looked in awe at the events
that just took place.
Jinnai: We’re in awe too.
Ranma: As in aww there’s more?
Zoisite: [Linda Blair Impresson] Make it stop! Make it stop!
"Lita," the Moon Princess said," or should I say, Jupiter?
As you know, I am the Princess of the Moon, right?"
Makoto: You tell me.
Lita simply nodded.
The Moon Princess continued, "You also know that you are my
servant, correct?"
Zoisite: Not a very good one but….
Again, Lita nodded.
"Not only are you supposed to protect me, but you are also to do
what I say. Now, I order you to pleasure me."
Jinnai: Oh what a surprising turn of events. [yawns]
Lita was confused.
Ranma: She ain’t the only one.
She couldn't believe that something like this would happen,
Zoisite: Well this is a lemon.
especially with Serena of all people. However, that
logic
Ukyo: Has nothing to do with this fic.
quickly took a back seat to her lust, which was in control of
her.
Zoisite: That and about 40 grams of cocaine.
Jinnai: I really envy her.
She walked over to the Moon Princess and whispered, "As you
command, my princess."
Makoto: I’ll do the dishes.
Lita then started to suck on the Princess' neck. The Moon Princess arched her head back and moaned in sheer pleasure.
Zoisite: While we are again in sheer pain.
At the same time, she took her hands and untied the meatballs on the top of her head allowing her blond hair to flow down to mid-calf. The Princess then stroked her hands through Lita's hair.
"That's good," the Princess said softly. "Keep going."
Jinnai: Or you can stop if you really want to.
Makoto: We can only hope.
"Yes, my princess," was Lita's answer. Staring at the Moon
Princess' breasts, which were a bit smaller than hers, Lita asked,
Jinnai: Why do these say made in Korea?
"Shall I pleasure you there?"
"Yes."
All: Noooo!
Obeying the order given to her, Lita continued to pleasure the Moon
Princess. She did this by pulling the Princess' top down and putting
one of the nipples in her mouth and pinching the other one, similar
to what she did with Amy. The Moon Princess let out a pleasure cry
as the sensations reached her mind.
Jinnai: Oh come on. Vomiting doesn’t feel that good.
All this was happening in front of Raye, Mina, and Amy. As the
three looked on at the impromptu peep show,
Makoto: Their meals made a return trip.
they each were turned on like light bulbs. The wet spot on Raye become larger as the juices flowed like a river.
Zoisite: Shouldn’t have had so much to drink.
Mina began to fell wet, also. She closed her legs, which allowed the pleasure to flow through her.
"I never would've thought this would happen," Mina thought.
"Imagine, Serena of all people. Who knew?"
Jinnai: Actually having lesbian scences using Serena is pretty common.
Ukyo: How do you know?
Amy was also aroused, but not as much as Raye and Mina. She
was too busy thinking thoughts similar to Mina's. She closed her
eyes and drifted back to a few moments ago when Lita was serving her.
Zoisite: The meal was that good?
It seemed that Amy, Raye, and Mina ceased to exist in Lita's mind.
Right now, the Moon Princess was her entire world.
Jinnai: And welcome to it.
As she licked circles around the nipple, Lita could sense the Moon Princess
reacting to the pleasure that was being served.
Zoisite: I’ve run outta jokes about that.
This continued for what seemed to be forever to both girls until Lita stopped licking
and looked into the Moon Princess' eyes.
"How am I doing, your highness?" she asked.
Ukyo: Do you want the truth?
"Hhhh....Very good," the Princess said lightly. "Now get on your
knees." Lita did what she was ordered to do. The Moon Princess
pulled up her skirt and draped it over Lita's kneeling form.
"There is a fire building down there," the Princess said.
Jinnai: Fire in the hole!
Zoisite: So get me a hose.
"Extinguish it."
Now surrounded by white, Lita looked toward the Princess' cunt.
She could easily see that it was very swollen.
Zoisite: And we care because?
She could also see that her womanly juices were flowing all the way down her long
shapely legs. The smell emanating from the blond mound
controlled Lita.
Makoto: Actually it was the hentai that’s writing this.
Zoisite: Working through some pain eh?
Lita grabbed the Moon Princess' legs and put her
mouth over the Princess' pussy. Hypnotized by the juices' aroma,
Lita thrusted
Zoisite: But the rockets were out of fuel.
her tongue into the Moon Princess' clit not missing one
drop of the Princess' flavor.
Jinnai: Don’t waste it! That stuff 47 bucks a pop! [everyone else whacks him]
The Moon Princess let out a loud cry
Makoto: We’re crying too at this point.
Jinnai: But for different reasons.
of pleasure as she could feel Lita's tongue penetrating her womanhood.
The Princess swayed her hips back and forth so that Lita's tongue
could go in even further. Lita definitely sensed this and knew that
her princess wanted more.
Zoisite: I was afraid of that.
She responded by pushing her face into he Princess' hole as far as she could go. Lita could barely breathe but it didn't matter. All that mattered was satisfying her princess.
Suddenly, Lita could feel the Moon Princess' leg muscles tightening.
She knew that the Princess was going to orgasm and that she had to
get her tongue out fast. Reacting fast, she withdrew her tongue
moments before the Princess' pussy muscles tightened.
Zoisite: Damn! Better luck next time.
The Moon Princess let out a cry much louder than the previous one.
She could feel the cum bursting out of her virgin self.
Zoisite: I think the virgin part is questionable.
She let out another cry just as loud but longer and then fell to her knees.
Lita then appeared from the Princess' skirt with a cum drenched face.
Makoto: [Turns green again]
She looked into the eyes of her princess, who by this time had
reverted back to Serena.
"I extinguished the fire," Lita said softly.
"Hhhh...hhhhh..." was all a very tired Serena could blurt out.
After a few moments, Serena got her breath back and
Ukyo: And realized how disgusting this whole fic is.
motioned Lita to come closer. When Lita came closer, Serena whispered, "Thank you."
Zoisite: For clearing my sineses.
The two then kissed one another passionately smearing cum all over
their faces. When they separated, Serena wiped some cum off her face
and licked it. "Hey,"
Makoto: [Serena impression] What the hell have I been doing?
she said, "I taste pretty good, if I don't say so myself."
All: Then don’t!
Zoisite: The old ones are the best.
"Yeah, you sure do," Lita said. With that said, Serena and Lita
proceeded to hug each other.
"You know what," Lita asked Serena.
"What?" Serena replied back.
Ukyo: I’m gonna throw up.
"I completely forgot about Raye and Mina." Lita got up and faced
the two girls, who by this time were totally aroused.
"I'm sorry I forgot you two," Lita said compassionately.
Jinnai: [Raye impresonation] Damn! I was hoping to sneak out!
Still under the control of her lust, she then asked them, "Okay, who's next?"
Raye stood up and started to speak.
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END OF CHAPTER TWO
All: [cheer]
Hmmm.....Serena and Lita getting it on. Who'd have thunk it?
Wondering what Raye will say?
All: Who cares?
Find out in chapter three of "Evening at Lita's"
Zoisite: I’d rather not.
While you're waiting, mail me and tell me what you think.
Also, mail me any suggestions you may have for this fic. I'll take
all suggestions into consideration
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